On 18 Feb 2007 08:19:46 -0800, "
wrote:

On Feb 18, 12:22 am, "Steve Cain" wrote:
The boy is sick.

as usual, your prose is beautifully crafted. still, i can't
refrain from voicing my opinion that the narrative itself, the frame
for your imagery, is less defined and confined than it ought to be,
for my taste. not a fatal flaw, certainly; but i kept wondering, as i
read, why this trip? what good does it do the child? why the need
for the artifice of the father talking to a seven month old while the
latter is unconscious?

Because the only time you can really talk to a baby is when it's
unconscious. Otherwise it's all goo goo and gah gah and amusing the
kid. It's not as if they listen when conscious. They interrupt and
burble and have diaper smells and burp and bloop. The very best times
to talk to babies are when they're unconscious.

no matter. as i recognize, and as everyone else has
acknowledged, it is a wonderful, dreamlike collection of images, and
is probably not intended to be more or less than that.

Lovely indeed.
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