On Feb 19, 12:19 am, " wrote:
On Feb 18, 12:22 am, "Steve Cain" wrote:

The boy is sick.

as usual, your prose is beautifully crafted. still, i can't
refrain from voicing my opinion that the narrative itself, the frame
for your imagery, is less defined and confined than it ought to be,
for my taste. not a fatal flaw, certainly; but i kept wondering, as i
read, why this trip? what good does it do the child? why the need
for the artifice of the father talking to a seven month old while the
latter is unconscious?

no matter. as i recognize, and as everyone else has
acknowledged, it is a wonderful, dreamlike collection of images, and
is probably not intended to be more or less than that.

Its all about bonding. Did you notice that 'the boy' got a name as the
story progressed? I thought it was lovely and calming.

-riverman