The Challenge

Howdy folks, long time no see. But I have a favor, I wrote a story
and I would like for you to read and tell me what you think. Here is
the thing, I am trying to develop a way of telling short stories that
are both entertaining and informative. This short story is called,
"The Challenge", but it is meant to be a primer on fishing jig-n-pig
in deepwater. It is my first attempt at this type of thing, but
please be honest in your assessment.

http://fishingbass.home.comcast.net/thechallenge.html

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Howdy folks, long time no see. But I have a favor, I wrote a story
and I would like for you to read and tell me what you think. Here is
the thing, I am trying to develop a way of telling short stories that
are both entertaining and informative. This short story is called,
"The Challenge", but it is meant to be a primer on fishing jig-n-pig
in deepwater. It is my first attempt at this type of thing, but
please be honest in your assessment.

http://fishingbass.home.comcast.net/thechallenge.html


Its a good story. The mixing of tenses would upset an english teacher, but
then you weren't writing for most english teahcers anyway,




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Good story, could have used a midget and a goat but hey what do I know :-)

Thanks for sharing
"Bob La Londe" wrote in message
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wrote in message
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Howdy folks, long time no see. But I have a favor, I wrote a story
and I would like for you to read and tell me what you think. Here is
the thing, I am trying to develop a way of telling short stories that
are both entertaining and informative. This short story is called,
"The Challenge", but it is meant to be a primer on fishing jig-n-pig
in deepwater. It is my first attempt at this type of thing, but
please be honest in your assessment.

http://fishingbass.home.comcast.net/thechallenge.html


Its a good story. The mixing of tenses would upset an english teacher,
but then you weren't writing for most english teahcers anyway,




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wrote:
... It is my first attempt at this type of thing, but
please be honest in your assessment.

Don't quit your day job.

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Ken Fortenberry

"Ken Fortenberry" wrote in message
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wrote:
... It is my first attempt at this type of thing, but
please be honest in your assessment.

Don't quit your day job.


He could benefit from a nice college level composition class or two, but it
was a good story. I was not in tears at the end, and it was a bit mamby
pamby, but I could feel what he was trying to say, and most importantly I
enjoyed reading it. Kinda like a serious side of Harry & Charlie.

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Bob La Londe
Fishing Arizona & The Colorado River
Fishing Forums & Contests
http://www.YumaBassMan.com


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Ken Fortenberry



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The Challenge

Group: rec.outdoors.fishing.bass Date: Tue, Feb 6, 2007, 6:56pm (CST-2)
From:
Howdy folks, long time no see. * But I have a favor, I wrote a story
and I would like for you to read and tell me what you think. Here is the
thing, I am trying to develop a way of telling short stories that are
both entertaining and informative. This short story is called, "The
Challenge", but it is meant to be a primer on fishing jig-n-pig in
deepwater. It is my first attempt at this type of thing, but please be
honest in your assessment.
http://fishingbass.home.comcast.net/thechallenge.html
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I read your story, my literary skills are somewhat limited...the cute
little blonde that sat in front of me in english class was a bit of a
distraction. But I will say that you told a pretty fair story, keep at
it. The world can always use some more good story tellers .

John